Every book needs a good blurb. You know, that brief description detailing what the book is about. I wrote a decent one for my first book, but I'm struggling to come up with The Battle for Liberty's blurb. I have a couple options. Would you be so kind as to help me choose the best one? Which description would make you want to buy my book? Or would neither of them capture your attention? I would very much like to know.
Both of them start out with the following:
She danced upon rays of sunshine and drank the wine of time. Naught in the world could touch her, high in her lofty place among princes of the stars and potentates of the mountains. Starlit flowers wove her blankets and wholesome creatures became her friends; she rested her head upon daisies in the evening and clothed herself in grasses in the morning. She was the Wild Miss. She was Liberty.
Then they split into separate identities. Here's the first one.
It wallowed beneath the earth in and among the arms of time. Naught in the world could reach it, low beneath the Mont and among icy hot winds of hell. The harshness of black carved Its soulless features, and Its cruelty birthed creatures of corroded darkness. Deep in the earth It dwelled until that time when It should surface once more. It was the Shadow. It was Kino.
Good and bad, light and dark; no hand may stay their inevitable collision. Yet when they meet with fate, who shall go forth victorious? ‘Tis for Liberty and this Kino to decide.
Here's the second one.
Far from the verdant lands of Liberty’s freedom, an evil ancient as the days grew in the darkest corner of Whenua. Kino It was called, and It hibernated within the blackened depths of Mont Ata. With the greatest power of the deities in Its emblematic hands, this Kino abided below till that idyllic time when the stolen treasure would rise to its utmost potency. When that time comes, naught in the world shall stay Its curséd hand. Nevertheless, Liberty shall have to try.
What do you think?
